I like this. It gave me a vision of angel-like beings fighting in the sky. And I like the way you described the sun set.
As for the third line, "Though today had been not so calm," I would write, "Though today had not been so calm." I feel as if it reads better, would you agree?
In truth, I normally never understand poetry. At least, I could never find a meaning in the words. But as I read the final lines of your poem, I was reminded of a time when I followed the crowed. When I didn't feel like I fit in. A time when I felt alone at heart.
Your poem opened my mind to the meaning behind the words of poetry, and I appreciate that.
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