I enjoyed the romance of this short story very much. Young love is always so beautiful. Just a couple of things I noticed and the first is that her father must be very deaf as well as mean considering they were almost screaming in the throes of passion. Perhaps in the parental home was not the ideal setting. Also there is a little too much descriptive text in some places for me such as when she says he is 7" taller than her and then goes on to give both their heights, the reader could have figured that out themselves. Overall a really good effort though and I enjoyed it. Thank you for sharing
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