Nicely done, the play on words not being the most intringing part for me, I found your dialogue to be very near excellent. I'm a big advocate of Hemingway's dialogue style and think that you got pretty close here. I like the natural way that your conversation moves, it had a real feel to it. I didn't fall victim to the cereal killer ending though, no pun intended. :)
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