Always nice to see the true hero win. I enjoyed the story. Your descriptions are short but full, well done. you developed some character very rapidly, made them (or at least one of them) very easy to relate with. Thank you for the ideas and inspirations.
Being a father, this nearly brought me to tears. This was well written, and worked on the emotions just as they should. As criminal prosecutor, this enraged me. Here in Nevada, a 3rd DUI in 7 years is mandatory prison time, the 4th is 2-15 years mandatory. I have never been able to understand what makes a person get behind the wheel after drinking. This is a very powerful and evocative piece. Thank you for sharing.
Very touching, the emotion is clearly felt. The second line confused me and I felt was forced so the rhyme could be made, but the flow throughout the rest of the poem was easy and fluid. I am sorry for your loss. Thank you for sharing.
Very nice! I really enjoyed the building tension and sorrow, culminated by the acceptance on both sides. I was fluctuating between anticipation and revulsion. I was a little nervous based on your description, but I'm glad I read it anyway. Great imagery throughout.
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