I liked how the noise at her window was also used as a way to give some important background information at the very beginning of the story; like setting the stage.
I would have liked to see more description of the enviroment outside. Conga does talk about her father saying there is nothing to see outside, but does that necessarily mean that the land is barren or maybe gutted? I feel like it couldn't be either because he told his wife he would make a garden and he'd have to have something to work with, but with no description I can't know what the outside looks like.
Other than that, I liked this story very much.
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