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FIRST IMPRESSION: There is a bit of a morals lesson in this story. It shows love is more important than things.
PLOT THOUGHTS: Your characters were believable and their actions were spoke volumes about the actions of people.
ERRORS/GRAMMAR/SPELLING: No obvious spelling/grammar errors; however, I would check punctuation rules for commas. There seems to be a lot of them throughout the story. The only thing I remember from English is that it's a pause.
FAVORITE PART:
"grieving because of all the mistakes that can’t be undone-" We've all been there!
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First Impression: You stayed with the prompt and included the number repeatedly. The surprise ending caught me off guard. I can usually pick up hints to the ending but missed this one completely.
Spelling and Grammar: No obvious spelling/grammar errors and no suggestions for improvement.
Additional Comments: Your intense images paint awesome pictures for your readers. You are able to capture the attention of your audience with these images. Great job!
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This is a story in which many can relate. In most every family, there is some kind of discord. These situations usually are most prevalent during holidays. You told so much in such short order. Each character was depicted with emotion. To end on a happy note was great writing. Thanks for sharing another of your masterpieces.
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First Impression: What a sad story! You did a great job using the prompt words for the flash fiction. Your ability to portray such sadness is indicative of your talent.
Spelling and Grammar:No obvious spelling/grammar errors
Additional Comments: Being able to relate somewhat to this plot brings the feelings closer to home. I enjoyed the story and felt Anita's sadness. Thanks for sharing!
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"Rain? Not on My Parade!"
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Your awesome talent shows in this piece of flash fiction. Being able to write from different points of view amazes me. Your vivid wording evoked mind images that delight. My favorite part: "She smelled funny too – a mixture of boiled cabbage and age". I could almost smell that as I read. Great job with the surprise ending. I stand in awe of your talent!
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First Impression: What a great story. I can relate so much to this. It's people like you who have made my first few months on WDC such a joyful experience. You are a talented writer and a awesome individual.
Spelling and Grammar:No obvious spelling/grammar errors
Additional Comments: This gives me a boost in confidence as I read each word. You did a great job using a little comedy to portray your first few months on WDC. Thanks for sharing such a delightful story!
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This is another of your continuous efforts on behalf of WDC. You are truly an asset to the site. Your contributions make all of us feel special. This is truly an awesome idea and gives encouragement to writers who are just finding their talent. Thanks so much for all you do.
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First Impression: What a neat perspective of a love that will never be again. You kept my attention without giving too much detail.
Spelling and Grammar: No obvious spelling/grammar errors
Flow: Each line flowed well and gave a sense of tranquility but loneliness.
Additional Comments: You are a very talented author. Thanks for sharing your writing with us.
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Welcome to WDC. Your poetry written for your mother-in-law shows great talent in writing poetry. Your words flow well and kept my interest throughout each line.
Suggestion: I'm not sure I wouldn't edit the following:
"She's always been there
When I needed her the most
Though times she was more of a Heavenly host"
It doesn't fit somehow. When I read it aloud, it seemed off. Maybe it's the difference in the number of lines. Not sure, but thought I'd bring it to your attention.
Anyway, great job! I hope you love WDC as much as I do!
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PLOT THOUGHTS: Your poem rhymes well and flows with no obvious balance issues. Your talent shows in your use of description.
ERRORS/GRAMMAR/SPELLING: No obvious spelling/grammar errors
FAVORITE PART:
"When I wasn't sure of what to do
But to hold you in my embrace"
A lot of new mother's feel this, including myself! We grow out of that quickly! My mom used to say that directions are written on their little butts but when they start going to potty alone and taking a bath alone, you run out of directions. (I think she meant they are older and more opinionated)....
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FIRST IMPRESSION: What a delightful rendition of a family reunion. Your vivid words paint pictures of the family of four and the food and the walk to the embraces.
ERRORS/GRAMMAR/SPELLING: No obvious spelling/grammar errors
FAVORITE PART: "I look forward to this chaos" because we all know that families can create excitement, chaos and love.
SUGGESTIONS: What a delightful poem showing thoughts and family and food. Thanks for sharing!
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FIRST IMPRESSION: Your words written in this poetry show much emotion. It shows the sadness that is felt. You did a great job portraying that to the reader in such a few words.
PLOT THOUGHTS: A hint of abuse is evident with dented walls.
ERRORS/GRAMMAR/SPELLING: I'm not sure I would capitalize "He" or "Him" if other words are not going to be. I makes him seem God-like; unless that is what you were trying to portray.
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FIRST IMPRESSION: My, how I can relate to this story. I have four brothers, six nephews and a son. Being gender outnumbered is something we learn to live with. You did a great job portraying the laughter and the fun at your house. Thanks for sharing.
ERRORS/GRAMMAR/SPELLING: No obvious spelling/grammar errors
FAVORITE PART: "Sometimes I truly adore being the only girl in this wonderful family. I get special treatment."
SUGGESTIONS: Your talent shows in your ability to interest your readers with something most of us take for granted; your time with your family. Keep sharing this with us!
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"Who is this Stranger?"
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First of all, congratulations on being Grandpa!
First Impression: Your comedy in this poetry is fabulous. It is always good to be able to laugh at ourselves.
Spelling and Grammar: No obvious spelling/grammar errors
Flow: This actually flowed well and was a cute read. Thanks for sharing it with us!
Additional Comments: Your talent and imagination show well in your poem. Great job!
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First Impression: The sadness and emotion was well depicted in your short story. The title caught my attention and the plot carried well. Your characters were believable. People can be so cruel with words!
Spelling and Grammar: No obvious spelling/grammar errors
Additional Comments: Your talent shows in your writing. Great job with this story!
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I am honored to be the 100th person to rate and review this idea! What an extraordinary way to give encouragement to members of WDC. Your commitment to the community of writers here shows a big part of your personality. Thanks for all you do!
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First Impression: Your awesome ability to describe a person with such vivid imagery shows great talent. I loved the way you look at the picture and conjure up a memory!
Spelling/Grammar/Suggestions:
"His stance, rebellious"; think "His" shouldn't be capitalized
Additional Comments: I'm enjoying your port raid!
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What a delightful and creative idea. The gardens are beautiful You did a great job with this idea and with motivating the members to participate. Thanks for all you do.
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FIRST IMPRESSION: You are very talented! The poem was bittersweet. It's sad to wake up one day and wonder where time has gone. I liked the image of the lady in the window! The poem read well and had a steady beat.
PLOT THOUGHTS: Reminds me of the joke about the invasion of the body snatchers; where someone exchanges her face with one that is wrinkled, her arms for those with "wings", etc. It made me smile!
ERRORS/GRAMMAR/SPELLING: No spelling/grammar errors
FAVORITE PART: The decision to enjoy each day!
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First Impression: What a creative imagination you have in spinning a legend that seems so real.
Spelling and Grammar: No obvious spelling/grammar errors
Flow: The poem flowed well and created a vivid image of the mother and son.
Additional Comments: I also learned 11 beat poetry with an AA BB rhyming scheme. Thanks for the experience.
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FIRST IMPRESSION: What an awesome piece of writing. Your talent in telling this story is evident to your readers. I felt the emotion and the trauma of that small boy. You pulled your readers in from the first paragraph. I thought he would stay with Linda and John. You left an air of mystery and I can't wait to read the next chapter.....
PLOT THOUGHTS: Since the plot is so near and dear to your heart, I feel as if you envelope us into the scene. Great job.
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FIRST IMPRESSION: Your opinion on an author's bioblock is well said. I actually did mine as part of a seven round contest. I was so new and learned to use colors and symbols and had a great time with it. It also now tells a little about me just to peak the reader's interest.
ERRORS/GRAMMAR/SPELLING:
" pieces information"; think this should be pieces of information
SUGGESTIONS: Your talent shows in your writing. This piece was very informative and told why you like to read a bioblock. Thanks for sharing!
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FIRST IMPRESSION: What a powerful message that is written in this story. Your talented ability to describe each character is awesome.
PLOT THOUGHTS: There is happiness in being adopted then sadness as Kathryn looses it. I missed the part about the third and youngest sister toward the end when speaking of Kathryn's wrath.
ERRORS/GRAMMAR/SPELLING: No obvious spelling/grammar errors
FAVORITE PART: The happiness Beth shows at the picnic table was very vivid. The part about the towels and the connection to them was a nice touch.
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FIRST IMPRESSION: It's unbelievable that you could tell so much about the two characters in so few words. Great job!
PLOT THOUGHTS: Board game, park place, chances, go Dad!
ERRORS/SUGGESTIONS: No suggestions for improvement
FAVORITE PART: The snake eyes of course and the warning!
OVERALL: Your monologue told the story in 299 words. Your talent shines through!!
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What I liked: I was engrossed in the story from the very beginning. I couldn't wait to see what kind of "special" coffee this story was about. It was a surprise ending!
Grammar/Spelling: No obvious spelling/grammar errors.
Overall impressions: I am in awe of your talent as a writer. This is not the first of your stories that I've read. Your ability to create characters and images to pull your readers in is awesome. Thanks for sharing.
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FIRST IMPRESSION: There is a bit of a morals lesson in this story. It shows love is more important than things.
PLOT THOUGHTS: Your characters were believable and their actions were spoke volumes about the actions of people.
ERRORS/GRAMMAR/SPELLING: No obvious spelling/grammar errors; however, I would check punctuation rules for commas. There seems to be a lot of them throughout the story. The only thing I remember from English is that it's a pause. 
FAVORITE PART:
First Impression: You stayed with the prompt and included the number repeatedly. The surprise ending caught me off guard. I can usually pick up hints to the ending but missed this one completely. 
Spelling and Grammar: No obvious spelling/grammar errors and no suggestions for improvement.
Additional Comments: Your intense images paint awesome pictures for your readers. You are able to capture the attention of your audience with these images. Great job!
Flow: Each line flowed well and gave a sense of tranquility but loneliness.
SUGGESTIONS: What a delightful poem showing thoughts and family and food. Thanks for sharing!
