Great story. It has a great sense of time and place, I'm guessing an apartment building in a large city during the sixties. It reminded me of my grandma who took keen notice of every unfamiliar car that came down her dead end street and always knew what her neighbors were up to. I liked the way the story flowed, although I was I kind of confused by the switch from third to first person. I actually think the 1st paragraph was the best one in the story. It makes me jealous. I have a hard time writing anything in the third and you seem to be great at it, judging from the small sample. The only errors I noticed were a few instances of not pluralizing=== " My mother was Ritchie's co-pilot" , "my mother's care, my father's indifferance". Great job.
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