Liked the flow a lot on this one.
Easy to tune into, I would break it into shorter lines but that's just a personal thing to me - I find it easier on my eye.
Wow, I love the rhythm in this.
I read it so fluidly right the way through.
I felt the energy, I saw clarity in the darkness - that's what this piece evoked in me.
My soul danced with these shadows.
Great job.
What an emotive piece. Your writing style paints a clear picture, it's relatable. Personally I had a deep sense of understanding this piece which is pretty awesome!
"She bathed in the in between" - I really liked this line along with "A lot of the time, she silently cried." - People keep their deepest emotions under lock & key, and this depicts it perfectly.
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