"Children play without an ounce of imagination
In this world two or three
Have an imagination"
I don't really understand this stanza. I wish I understood it better. I honestly think you could have added more. The meaning of this poem is kind of hazey but I think I understand what is happening. Great Job!
"I pray for forgiveness and hope to atone for my cruel, misguided, violent, ambitions." I really like this line. It gives a certain sparkle. I don't really know it just stands out to me. I enjoyed your poem very much. Keep up the great work. I like the use of "chain link fence". I hope freedom is good to you.
"riding the back of carelessness.
until one day you become pregnant.
then everything comes crashing down on you.
reality tramples your down-trodden spirit, leaving you breathless.
you grasp onto the straws of your previous life."
This poem is very deep but I wonder do all women feel this way about pregnancy? If not then maybe add the age of the woman or girl. Overall this poem is really nice. I love how a guy can write about a topic that is usually associated with women. Great job!
"cheer up , your beautiful,
keep your head up at all times,
Never give up...
No more pain, no more tears, no more lies ,
saying that you cant do it.
You're gonna make it hope, hope, hope!
Block the pain, my dear, block the pain. "
I love how inspirational your poem is. It is very amazing. Next time check to make sure everything is spelled right. Still it was awesome.
I really enjoyed this poem. It is very inspiring and creative. I really enjoyed the style, and way it was written. The imagery is rad. The meaning of your poem is truly intriguing. It pulls the reader in and gives a whole new meaning to beautiful. Keep up with the good work. I would like to see more from you.
I really enjoyed this poem. It has great detail ,meaning and also a very well made structure.
"My heart once beat slow
It once meant only pain
It gave you love when you proved impossible to love –"
This quote from the poem means a lot to me, I can really relate to the feeling. Making a poem that can be related to by others is one of the best kind you can write. People may like a funny rhyming poem but ones that others can relate to are never going to be forgotten. this is amazing.
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