Thought I'd respond in kind after reading some of your work. Sadly I know little of Vlad the Impaler and his wives, but liked the general gist of the story. I did however find it a little stilted in it's flow.
For example. as it's only my personal opinion. 'It pulled a few strands of hair from her head and she winced' Possibly sounds better as 'It pulled strands of hair from her head, causing her to wince'
That said, I read to the end in enjoyment and was able to visualise the scene you portrayed of a desperate but proud women, defiant against the attack, driven to a dangerous end.
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