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Rated: ASR | (3.0)
Good poem. Something about it makes me think of Tolstoy, but that's useless and probably random commentary. I like the "introduction of the protagonist - exploring his environment - conclusion" build-up. It takes your for a nice ride before landing right back in the gutter by adding a 'merely', pointing out that a person becomes so much more than a person when he is judged, described or remembered by other people, ,but in the end is still just a man.

Ok, so the second time I've read it, it's like I read something completely different. At first, I think the poem reminded me of Ozymandias by Shelley, where a great ego speaks about his timeless accomplishments, which ultimately have little value. but now that I read it again, I can spot humbleness akin to saint Augustine in it, well aware of his own flaws and capacities as a mere mortal, and very humble about it. Nice one, keep it up.
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Rated: E | (2.5)
Hey My Heart Is Made Of Words,

Lovely poem. giving, smiling and persistence will not always lead to Love and Happiness, but the way you wrote it made me doubt this. Nice soothing words for when the going get's tough. Could you keep it up, please!

Cheers!
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Rated: E | (3.5)
Hey Inkwell,

I love the rythm in this poem. Was a little put off by the 'eternal light from dawn to dusk' part, but was blown away by the last two lines. Very fitting.
Incidentally also the only rhyming lines in your poem, but I only noticed once I started reading out loud. Keep it up.
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