Oh wow. This poem is woderfully written, but very sad all the same. There is a line that you might want to just fix a little bit. I'm assuming that this is a typo... but I tend to point things out... I don't mean to sound rude.
Line 11: That figure of cours is you, Mom
**That figure of course is you, Mom
Okay. You need to add an 'e' onto the end of 'course' and since you were speaking to her, you need a comma before her name.
Other than that. Great job. I hope to see more work from you soon.
Write on,
Emma J. Maynard
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