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Review by Mrs. Populatery
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Great story I'm really enjoying it so far.
I feel like the introduction could have been a little stronger with more details.
I think you jumped into early about her friend Trina dyeing. I didn't really see anything wrong with the way Haley was acting in the first 2 sentences I've known her. Maybe you should show us a little bit more of how awkward Haley is after her friend died.
I think you should also add some more details about how the characters look. I'm really interested to know what Haley and Trevor look like.
I know this is just the first chapter and you might expand on it later but I just wanted to let you know in case you weren't.
I'm not really good with spelling or grammar but everything looks okay to me, I had no problem reading. I really love to know what happens next Haley's plan sounds very interesting....:D

I would ask you to review my work as well but unfortunately I've lost my upgraded membership and the stories that are in my port aren't fit to be reviewed. So have a nice day! :D
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Review of Stay  
Review by Mrs. Populatery
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Amazing poem!
I thought it was very touching and sweet.
I really loved this part the most
"God please, stay right here, do not disappear"
I loved how you had a new verse for every line and you never repeated yourself.
I hate it in long poems when people say the same thing they already stated with different words.
Good Job!
Keep up the fantastic work! :D

I would ask you to review my work as well but unfortunately I've lost my upgraded membership and the stories that are in my port aren't fit to be reviewed. So have a nice day! :D
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Review of Casted Spell  
Review by Mrs. Populatery
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Amazing Song!
I would really love to hear it if you make it into an actual song.
It was very catchy and I really loved the chorus it fit the song perfectly.

"You casted a spell on me.
Time,essence and ecstasy, why didn't I see it in the start,
That you'd be the keeper of my heart."
I could sing this all day lol.
Outstanding Job!
Keep up the good work!
You Rock!

I would ask you to review my work as well but unfortunately I've lost my upgraded membership and the stories that are in my port aren't fit to be reviewed. So have a nice day! :D


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Review of Journal Of Mine  
Review by Mrs. Populatery
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Excellent poem!
I loved every minute of it.
I know this poem is supposed to be an emotional one but i found it very funny.
I think people actually do ask their journals questions like that.
Good Job!
Keep up the wonderful work! :D

I would ask you to review my work as well but unfortunately I've lost my upgraded membership and the stories that are in my port aren't fit to be reviewed. So have a nice day! :D
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Review by Mrs. Populatery
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Excellent poem!
It was very romantic and catchy to read.
I felt as if someone was writing a love letter the their lover who lives far away or something.
Amazing job!
Keep up the good work! :D
I would ask you to review my work as well but unfortunately I've lost my upgraded membership and the stories that are in my port aren't fit to be reviewed. So have a nice day! :D
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Review of Dream of Tiny Men  
Review by Mrs. Populatery
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Excellent poem!
It was very catchy and entertaining to read.
I loved how you rhymed as you were telling the story.
It was almost as catchy as a song.
When you said the little people I couldn't help but think of the little army men from the movie "Toy Story ".
Good Job!
Keep up the fantastic work!
I would ask you to review my work as well but unfortunately I've lost my upgraded membership and the stories that are in my port aren't fit to be reviewed. So have a nice day! :D
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Review of Lost Boys  
Review by Mrs. Populatery
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Nice poem!
I loved how you used lots of detail.
It added lost of emotion and mystery to the poem.
But I'm not quite sure what its about.
I would love it if you could explain it to me.
Good Job!
Keep up the great work!
I would ask you to review my work as well but unfortunately I've lost my upgraded membership and the stories that are in my port aren't fit to be reviewed. So have a nice day! :D
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Review of When It Rains  
Review by Mrs. Populatery
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Fantastic poem!
I LOved every minute of it.
You're word choice was excellent!
Everything fit together perfectly and rhymed.
I really felt like I can relate to this poem.
My favorite part was "When it rains, each droplet will cleanse your sorrow
It's music will muffle all your fears of tomorrow"
Great Job!
Keep up the amazing work!
5 STARS!
I would ask you to review my work as well but unfortunately I've lost my upgraded membership and the stories that are in my port aren't fit to be reviewed. So have a nice day! :D
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Review of me...  
Review by Mrs. Populatery
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Awesome poem!
It was very inspiring and creative.
I think you were trying to say if you can't write you will die?
(or at least that's what I got from it)
Good Job!
Keep up the fantastic work!
I would ask you to review my work in return but unfortunately I've lost my upgraded membership and the stories in my port now are not fit to be reviewed :(
Have a nice day.
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Review of Love of Mine  
Review by Mrs. Populatery
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Great poem!
Your word choice was excellent.
I loved the way the poem flowed.
I also thought this part was funny "It was an accident to fall so in love with you.
As deep down I know the truth.
You’ll only destroy me and take my youth,"
Good Job!
Keep up the excellent work! :D

I would ask you to review some of my work but unfortunately I've lost my upgraded membership :(
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Review of Ztory  
Review by Mrs. Populatery
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Awesome little story.
I didn't really get the first part too much.
But I loved how u wrote that the guy stole the man's wife.
I also liked the last part about him calling himself a bozo.
Good Job!
Keep up the good work! :D


I would ask you to review some of my work but unfortunately I've lost my upgraded membership :(
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Review of Rain  
Review by Mrs. Populatery
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Rated: E | (4.0)

Amazing Poem!
I could tell it came from the heart.
I loved how you used lots of details.
I also liked how you did more than rhyming
you actually told a story about the rain and how it makes you feel.
Amazing Job!
Keep up the fantastic work!

I would ask you to review some of my work but unfortunately I've lost my upgraded membership :(
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Review of Diamond  
Review by Mrs. Populatery
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Great poem!
It words flowed very well together and your word choice was great.
But I'm not really sure what this poem is about.
I thought it was saying love is like a diamond but I'm not really sure.
Good Job!
Keep up the amazing work! :D

I would ask you to review some of my work but unfortunately I've lost my upgraded membership :(
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Review by Mrs. Populatery
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Good Job!
I feel this poem depicted the lives of bugs.
I thought so when you talked about the shoe part.
My favorite part was "A drop of water
Falls on her face
And a flower is born,
The bloom of the human race."
I thought this part was very well written.
Good Job!
Keep up the excellent work.
I would ask you to review some of my work but unfortunately I've lost my upgraded membership :(
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Review by Mrs. Populatery
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Great Poem.
Everything you said was true and relationships.
I loved the way you used magnetism to describe love.
That was very original and creative.
Good Job!
Keep up the excellent work! :D

I would ask you to review some of my work but unfortunately I've lost my upgraded membership :(
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Review of Unchangeable Me  
Review by Mrs. Populatery
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Amazing poem!
I really liked this poem because I could really relate to it.
Its a shame when people try to control your life.
But I had on question I'm not sure if this is an error or not but in this line "I don't want to be you
I just want to be myself
No one can tell me what to
I am enough for me"

shouldn't it be "No one can tell me what to do"
Good Job!
Keep up the great work!

I would ask you to review my work but unfortunately I've lost my upgraded membership :(
So have a nice day! :D
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Review of Instead of ...  
Review by Mrs. Populatery
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Rated: E | (3.5)

Awesome poem!
I loved the way you repeated the same line adding something different each time.
I don't read a lot of those poems anymore.
Its fun to read a happy poem for once instead of all these dark depressing ones all the time.
I thought the ending was great I would of never thought this poem would be told by a mirror.
Good job!
Keep up the amazing work!

I would ask you to review my work but unfortunately I've lost my upgraded membership :(
So have a nice day! :D
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Review of fore ever love  
Review by Mrs. Populatery
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Amazing Poem!
It flowed together perfectly.
I simply adore your word choices.
I loved how everything rhymed as the poem told a story.
I loved how you used lots of details as well.
I could feel the romantic emotions of the poem and I could picture everything as I read.
Good Job!
Keep up the amazing work!

I would ask you to review my work but unfortunately I've lost my upgraded membership :(
So have a nice day! :D
Well Done 5 STARS!
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Review of Nightfall  
Review by Mrs. Populatery
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Excellent poem!
I loved the way you showed so much detail.
I could literary picture everything that was happening.
The details really made you feel the sadness emotion of the poem.
Fantastic Job!
Keep up the good work, and I hope you find a new job soon. :)

I would ask you to review my work but unfortunately I've lost my upgraded membership :(
So have a nice day! :D
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Review of Forgotten  
Review by Mrs. Populatery
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Wonderful poem!
I could feel the sadness.
I loved how you repeated the same phrase again.
It adds character to the poem.
Good Job!
Keep up the amazing work! :D

I would ask you to review some of my work but sadly I've lost my upgraded membership :( I wasn't able to write enough reviews in time to save it.
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Review of bipolorized  
Review by Mrs. Populatery
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Rated: E | (4.5)

Amazing Poem!
I can really relate to this poem.
I think its crazy how the heart has so many emotion built up inside it.
Good Job!
Keep up the awesome work! :D

I would ask you to review my work but sadly I've lost my ungraded membership because I couldn't make enough reviews in time so have a wonderful day! :D
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Review of Questions  
Review by Mrs. Populatery
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Awesome poem!
This poem has a sense of mystery and truth.
I also think its weird how so many things and people in this world contradict themselves all the time.
Fantastic Job!
Keep up the amazing work!

I would ask you to review my work but sadly I've lost my ungraded membership because I couldn't make enough reviews in time so have a wonderful day! :D
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Review of Life  
Review by Mrs. Populatery
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Awesome poem!
I really spoke to my heart because its so true.
Everything you wrote is completely true.
Its so amazing how life just passes by in like a blink of an eye.
First you were a child, then u become a teenager, and the a adult at the snap of a finger.
Good Job!
Keep up the fantastic work! :D

I would ask you to review my work but sadly I've lost my ungraded membership because I couldn't make enough reviews in time so have a wonderful day! :D
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Review of Scars  
Review by Mrs. Populatery
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Amazing poem!
For some reason this poem reminded my of a patchwork quilt.
I'm not sure of it was the intention or not.
To me it felt like it was a quit of pain or something like that.
The poem flowed very well all the words were used in the right places.
I really felt a sense of emotion and mystery in this poem.
Keep up the excellent work! :D

I would ask you to review my work but sadly I've lost my ungraded membership because I couldn't make enough reviews in time so have a wonderful day! :D
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Review by Mrs. Populatery
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Rated: E | (3.5)
Great Poem!
I feel this poem is very sad.
I pictured a lover standing out my the ocean thinking about how they have nothing to remember their lover by.
I would have loved it if the poem was a little longer and it described the person's feelings a little bit more.
Good Job!
Keep up the amazing work!

I would ask you to review my work but sadly I've lost my ungraded membership because I couldn't make enough reviews in time so have a wonderful day! :D
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