This is very, very good. The story moves along nicely, at a good pace. The one thing that threw me a bit is Clew's way of speaking. When writing an accent, it's good to ask if it will move the story along, if it will be too confusing to the reader, and if it's necessary. A lot of the time, an accent can be implied with descriptions. :)_
Thea
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