The premise was good, although among creatures like unicorns and dragons, lions seem less like kings and more like estranged princes. Either way, I enjoyed the story and hope to see more of your work in the future. Keep on writing and watch out for sneaky punctuation mistakes.
I enjoy the premise greatly, and I really like the turnaround at the end. It really seemed like the idea was for them to achieve peace in a Romeo-and-Juilet maneuver, and I'm sure that's what the enemy chief thought too. so it was the perfect time for a trap!.
Seems this was part of a writing contest. Except for a few weird quirks, it looks pretty normal. Some of the word choices feel weird, and some sentences are pretty long. Also, I'm not sure what 'Another day in paradise" is supposed to mean though. keep up the good work.
There is a lot of repetition, although I guess that's part the point of the poem. it's a very memorable moment, but personally I feel 60 lines on it is too long. It could just be me, though. Keep writing and improving, as I look forward to seeing more of your work
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