This is absolutely beautiful! I think it is one of my favorite poems! It is so true. If humanity would embrace our differences the world would be a much better place. I think your poem was inspired, by higher authority. Your point is so 'matter of factly' spoken. It was refreshing to read!
I like it, but I felt you were just getting started.I liked the last line. Most people only think about the safari hunts and the wildlife when they think of Africa. Many do not even know about the genocide and the AIDS epidemic. I think works like this help get people interested in the problems in other countries.
This was hard to follow at first. Add an explanation at the intro. I felt a little bit lost until I read the description above the story. Then it made sense. It was too technical in the lingo right off the bat. The new intro will help people grasp who or what is telling the story. Over all-Great job!
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