I loved your story. The humor was executed well, the punchline was perfectly placed which didn't feel too long to wait and writing was easy on the eye. The characters were really easy to picture in my head and I actually was playing it like a movie scene while reading it.
I am actually going to go through your portfolio for more of yours after finishing this review. Keep writing man!
First of all I like your writing style. It's fluent and spontaneous. I like it. As a flash fiction i think it is a successful one. It didn't go too deep into the story, it stayed clear in what it wanted to say and also the readers gathered everything they had to know from this short piece. it was clever.
Only one complain though. Very little. I couldn't really figure what were you trying to say with the work out part. It seemed a bit exaggerated. Of course it's only my personal opinion.
Anyways keep on writing. Waiting for your next one.
Mahir.
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