good story =] really coooool!! but i think,.. only my opinion...MINE... change the first paragraph a bit... make it more catchy, something that will hold people like sticky paper! i was a little bit lost on the first paragraph... but go on with it =D... write write and WRITE =D
i like this song already and i have only read the words! i felt the progression in it and the meaning of the song is so awesome! I cant remember when last i had a peacefull christmas =[,,, but i like it =D you put the right words in the right place! sorry if this isnt the best review... still new to this whole thing... =]
i like it... i like the flow in it... it isnt top notch yet... can use a little touch up and a re read! but keep on doing wht u do man... wish i could write that well for the matter of fact! if you would like to share work, email me at wolgod@yahoo.com!
amazing... all i can say is amazing! couldnt catch at first what was going on, but damn dude! this is some powerfull words u skoe there! the way u write, the way the words relate with each other... damn man i loved this piece! would like to read more of your work... would u like to email me one time? wolgod@yahoo.com
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