I was on the edge of my seat while reading this, literally. You are an amazing writer.
One thing though what does he look like? I really want to know
I really like the language you used, it was very effective and definitely added to the story. I don't mean to be rude or anything but, the last line didn't really bring out any emotion for me.
the only thing I would change really is that last line.
Your writing is extremely memorable and moving. I really like it.
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