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Rated: E | (3.5)
I like your rhythm, but it would be better visible with some punctuation. I don't necessarily mean all the standard — it's poetry — but some. And this idea is possessive, so it cancels empathy: "One more who loves you and will love you more and more always; One more who depends on you for life, and will depend on you for life" (?)
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