I have a nose,I have a cat,and I have seen buildings "stacked" against the sky ....like mountains...I have to give you props for this story ,because it simply makes me beg for more....
This is relate-able...on EVERY point you have made. It helped me see the perspective of my own inner child when I grew up with these conflicts. Absolutely wonderful,and great advice!
I am a mother,myself...and my own mother is aging quickly,so I can relate to the expectation of wanting her there ,and her presence(physically) isn't. Hang onto what you can...of her memory...even if it's writing about her ,to keep her memory alive.
I am not a script critic....but I do feel that subtle changes could be made..I am a little lost in the narrative,but,I would say ,keep working with it ...!!!
Very heartfelt content.It is amazing just how our best friends bring out the best in us,even when we feel our worst...I know..I have a best friend like your song says...Best wish on your lyrical,poetical,and wonderful journey.
Nice bit of poetry here,however ,I might advise the following adjustment...albeit a minor one ...separating it into small stanzas ,may help it flow better...Best wishes on your literary journey!
I find this relate-able in so many ways,and unfortunately those that speak those words as you said,but do not live them,are most assuredly -----hypocrites!
George,you wrote it ,dare I say.."perfectly".The concept you bring is finally realized ,if only to yet"another drop in the ocean"...which "collectively,and in unison,make up the ocean!Thanks for sharing this...
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