The progression is really smooth, and the methods of playing around with the little civilizations is unique. Great to see some nose play, and some stuff with tools! I love the contrast in scale; the way she's still trying to hide things despite her omnipotence creates a sense of taboo secretism that only shrink stories can pull off. It'd be cool to see what the little cities experience when they get covered in breasts or snot!
Short, but sweet. Evokes images really nicely. I feel like the paragraphing and verb tense somewhat distract from the text, but those are really formatting issues. What really draws me in is two factors: the subtle shift in the writing style as the main character's thoughts become more muddled, and the sense of vagueness behind the whole thing. The way names and the true nature of the magic stuff are hidden make filling in the blanks easy. That on its own wouldn't be too impressive; the way it elaborates strongly on some details to evoke mental images while keeping others hidden strikes a careful balance that make the emotions feel very real.
Nice job.
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