I think that this is a great idea. Writers of books have also had their books turned into movies and had someone else do the screen writing and getting paid to do this. Why not write a book that you can turn into a screenplay on your own. I am definitely interested.
Please take this review as a help not a hinderance, I am an English teacher. The story starts out with intrigue and then the story builds with the intrigue, nice writing. I did notice a few minor things to be corrected. When Farooq ( the arabic spelling is Farouk) was in the parking lot it isn't the floor of the parking lot but it could be written as the pavement or ground, also when he was driving looking here and there it mentions a boy and girl talking to eachother (no space between the words each and other). I will like to read the next chapters. Write On!
I am a history buff and was born right after WWII, so I have heard stories from uncles and my father about the war. This writing shows in great detail what really happened at Midway in the ensuing air attack by Navy planes. The author has written an excellent piece and should continue with historical writing. I appreciated the writing even showing when the radio transmissions were cut short by someone being shot down. Write On!
I have been a history buff for many years and this writing shows that what I had learned was lacking in truth or that history books used to educate people can alter or omit the truth. I enjoyed the writing and the helpful notes at the bottom of the article. I would like to see more writing by this author on more interesting truths. Write On!
I have read many wysteries in my life and I like this one. It is well written and the descriptions of one who has been shot are correct in every way. I write that because I have been shot, only once but once is enough. The plot and characters are well written and the story line follows in a nice progression. I would like to see the main character revived in a new writing. Write On!
The story and characters are life like. The explanation of the characters and their working relationship are well written and you can sense the tiredness of both and then the awareness of each other besides working together. The sex writing is good explaining about a perceived difference in their ages. Write on!
Well written and it makes you feel as though you are watching what is happening in the plane. The explanations of the male character and what he was thinking and fantasizing makes you want to read more. The description of the female and how the sex went from her fondling herself to the both of them getting each other off is exciting for the reader. Write On.
I really appreciate Cardiologists because I have one who helped me when I had my heart arttack 9 years ago and I'm still active and teaching english as a second language here in Thailand. The Cardiologist that wrote this is definitely one who needs to be appreciated for what he has done to prolong someones life. My problem was not diet related but Rheumatic Fever when I was 13 years old caught up to me later in life. Write on Doc.
This is a good beginning to a mystery. The characters should be developed a little bit more and maybe some background history to flesh out the story line. I think that this will be a very good story when it is completed. I have read mysteries and other types of writing this could be one of the better ones I have read.
I find that reading this the writer is great and does not let what others think bother his or her writing, and does not consider what others might call a handicap be one in their life. It is well written and explains the so called problems of being a one handed writer. Write on and the best to you.
The thoughts here are those of alot of people. We have all been taught that history repeats itself and we have seen it through wars. My grand mother once said that she had seen everything in her life except beam me up Scotty. The writing here shows that people want the best for their children in the future and that they will do the same for their offspring. Keep on writing and the best to you.
A very helpful and meaninful explanation of how to get noticed outside of writing.com. It has helped me as a new writer to understand more and to give me the tools to let others know of my writing and also about writing.com. I will be using these tips from now on and thank you for the information.
I have a friend that is bipolar and the writing here explains the agony that the person feels about not being in control of ones emotions. I have seen the mood swings that are written about personally and they are scary to see. I admire someone who writes about their psychological problems as well as medical problems. Stay strong and the best to you.
I have read many action adventure stories in my life and I find that this one is one of the best beginnings to a great one. The explanations about the characters, the weather and the characters emotions is well written and you can picture in your mind the surroundings. I will definitely want to read this when it is completed. Keep up the writing.
This is a short poll, but it asks questions that people have been asking for a long time. I personally have changed from Christianity to Buddhism because it answered questions that I had. One of the reasons I changed is because in my old religion they tell you that you will go to hell forever. Now if you are 30 years old and faced with eternity in hell by a God who loves you where is the love really?
I have just finished 5 years in Iraq and saw this happen regularly. The writing makes you feel like you are there and at the same time feel sad because of what is happening to this person. It shows the human side of someone dying. He is worried that he never married or had any children, also that he was remembering his past and family. This is very well written in my opinion and shows the problems in the battlefield with medical evacuation. I was a combat medic in Viet Nam and the problems written brought back many memories.
The character build up is well written and the story line follows a very good path of suspense. I did notice a few spelling errors that will need to be corrected. Finnallised should be Finalized and also Reggie Tang is spelled in a few places as Reggie Tong. This will be a good book when it is completed.
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