Hello, emerin-liseli  !
First of all, I'd like to thank you for purchasing a review from my shop. Thanks for the opportunity to read something on Writing.com I might never have gotten to see, otherwise.
This is a review of "Prologue (maybe)"  and "Chapter One: Eunae" . You asked me to review up to "Chapter Eight: Resectioning" .
"Prologue (maybe)"
 Technical Suggestions:
her azure eyes were heavy with sleep and fear. -- I could see her eyes being heavy with sleep, but not at the same time she's afraid. The way I understand it, fear has an awakening effect upon the body for most people; I would expect it to wake her up and widen her eyes as a sympathetic response to whatever's causing her fear.
Valorén drew her hand so Veradien, whimpering, was drawn magically toward her. -- You have two uses of the term "to draw" here in once sentence. I think it might flow more easily if you were to change one of them.
Vasha made a movement as if to stop it, but seeing the look in Valorén’s eyes, she thought better of it. She watched with growing horror as Valorén found the small cut on Veradien’s forearm. -- This paragraph is quite short; I think if you went into more description, you'd be able to better show us, the readers, what's going on. For instance, what sort of movement does Vasha make? She raises a hand? Takes half a step to put herself between them? What sort of look does she see in Valorén’s eyes? Anger? Hatred? Disdain? Does she narrow her eyes? Lower her eyebrows? Or does something in her expression dare Vasha to do something? What does it look like when Vasha's horror grows? Does she start to tremble? Does she gesture toward Veradien, trying to get her to turn her arm away from Valorén’s easy sight? Does Vasha's expression change? Does she get pale, or begin to blush?
She studied the gossamer memory for a moment, and then turned towards her sisters -- This is one of my personal tics, I'm afraid. Most other readers, I think, would not even notice, but the "s" is not necessary on "toward". I think it's a custom that has fallen in to spoken language and is now making its way into literature... but I know it caught my eye a few times while reading these chapters. Like I said, it's one of my personal pet peeves, and it's up to you whether or not you want to go with the English I was taught, or the English taught in schools today. 
you were going to use me for the sacrifice anyways. -- This is another unnecessary "s".
the future of her world and many other worlds were being shaped -- This sounds right because the word right before it is plural, but the noun that's being shaped is actually the future, which in this case is singular. I could see you using "futures", instead, because we're talking about several worlds, here, and if you change that, "were" could remain. If you choose to continue to use "future", though, that should become "was".
She yanked Vasha close, picked up the silver knife, still crusted in Veradien’s blood, and drew it deeply into Vasha’s flesh. -- "Drew" just doesn't work for me here. I could see her drawing it across Vasha's flesh, but I think another word, such as "thrust" or "plunged" would be more descriptive and accurate.
The first rays of the sun hit. -- You have two empty lines after this sentence, and I think you may have intended just one. I've found that Writing.com occasionally does this to me when I have the spaces after the period of my last sentence in a paragraph. So if you don't intend to have two blank lines between this and the next paragraph, it's easily fixed.
Just as a matter of formatting, I think you might want to have an empty line or two at the end of the prologue. It's probably just me, personally, but I think it might look better that way; as it is, the copyright information almost seems to run into the story.
General Thoughts:
At the opening of the prologue, I picture Vasha and Veradien sitting on the floor between the window and the curtain. I think the moonlight could be coming in the window beside them, or behind one of them, but not behind both of them... unless you mean for the reader to have a more distant view of them than I initially have.
She cut her sister’s left forearm, right below the elbow. -- I can't imagine cutting my own sister... I don't know what it's like to cut someone; the closest thing I know is that sticking a needle in an orange is good practice for developing the necessary force to stick someone in the arm. I'm not trying to promote gore in the story, but I'd like to see more details, here. I'd like to see Veradien squirm, if she realizes that her sister's pulled out a knife or anything. I'd like to see Vasha hesitate, just a moment, unless cutting herself or others has become natural to her in her practice of magic. If she's never cut anyone before, does she realize how deeply she needs to cut to draw blood? Does the spell she's enacting require a certain amount of blood? A certain length or depth of the cut?
Are there any concerns for how quickly, or how well, the cut might heal?
Veradien screamed, but the sound was muffled by Vasha’s hand and the dusty drapes. -- I'd like to see Vasha let go of her sister's hand and the knife before she raises a hand to muffle her scream. I wonder, too, if this sentence and the one before it could trade places; where it is, it seems to me that Veradien is screaming in reaction to her blood hissing into steam.
When Valorén walks in, I begin to wonder what room the sisters are in. I think we can assume it's not Uncle's study, but... is it their bedroom? The parlour? Oh! It's said later on that this is a library. Is it apart from their uncle's study? Would you be willing to give the reader more clues, earlier on, about the room?
I would like to know more about these sisters, in general. Do they look a little bit like each other? Would an outsider never believe they're sisters, by their appearances? Do any of them have a tone of voice that would make a listener squirm? Plus, if this story ends up going where I think it will, in relation to the prologue, their descriptions would provide a clue that might make your readers slap themselves in the forehead and ask, "Why didn't I see that before?"
Valorén whispered, her face turned away from her younger sister. -- What's she looking at? I think if I were as angry as she seems to be, I'd be staring directly at the person who'd angered me. I'd try to dig into her soul with my eyes. I'd have to know what her reaction was. In this case, if calls more attention to Valorén than her sister, I as the reader would like to know what it is.
Vasha stood in defiance. -- What is this? I mean, tell me what it looks like. Does she put her hands on her hips? Ready herself for some defensive magic, perhaps? Plant her feet in the carpet (I imagine carpet  ) and give Veradien a glance to make sure she's clear enough of danger? Try to stare her sister down?
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"Chapter One: Eunae"
Technical Suggestions:
There are a few places in this chapter in which you use the past tense, when I would have expected the past participle. For example:
Their father died after he was demoted from his high-ranking position as magistrate over their district, and her small family had no where else to go other than the widow’s section.
I think this would be more easily read as:
Their father had died after he was demoted from his high-ranking position as magistrate over their district, and her small family had had no where else to go other than the widow’s section.
And...
Contrary to popular belief, the last rebellion was caused by the distraught wives, daughters and mothers of dead or demoted noble men.
I think would read better as:
Contrary to popular belief, the last rebellion had been caused by the distraught wives, daughters and mothers of dead or demoted noble men.
(Incidentally, I have to wonder if you meant to say that these women had not caused the last rebellion. That's what the rest of the paragraph seems to imply.)
a festering wound that would not heal. -- "that would not heal" seems redundant after saying "festering wound".
“We haven’t a transfer student in a long time,” remarked Calixte -- Should there be a "had" after that "haven't"?
General Thoughts:
You mention Eunae's tearful departure from home, and how the memory still pains her, but you don't say how long it's been since she left home. A few hours? A few days? How long has it taken her to get here, this far from home? Has she spent a night alone along the way? I think that if we, the readers, know this information, we'll be better able to feel for her... we'd have a better sense of how she feels about her family, and how that balances with how she feels about going to this school.
The widows' section is provided for the disgraced women of noble society. Was their family disgraced because of Eunae's father's demotion? To me, the term "disgraced women" is a particularly... violent one. "Dishonored" might be more appropriate, if this is because of her father. But I think where you're going with this choice is to show that they have fallen from the graces of noble society...
In any case, it makes me wonder what happens to the widows who have never been members of high society. What about the wives of dead merchants, fisherman, and bakers? Where do they go, and how bad is that if the refuge of the noblewomen is so small and horrible?
On that note, does the fact that they are disgraced not mean they are no longer noblewomen? You mention the possibility that Eunae's teachers selected her from all the nobility around.
Why has Eunae already been assigned a Cloud? Is it because she's transferring? Do all schools have Clouds with the same names and personalities? (More on this in a later chapter's review) I have to think that she hadn't been a part of a Cloud back at her old school, though, since Eunae's sponsor had had to explain things to her.
You say that her sponsor has also explained contests to her, so it seems to me that when Calixte breaks into her explanation of Sylph's battle arrangements, Eunae should have some reaction -- what parts of what Calixte says sound familiar to her? What parts sound new?
Why does Calixte go into this information? I understand the need to explain these things to the reader, and I often think that having one character tell another is the best way to go about such things. Calixte, however, doesn't seem to me to be very excited about the Battle Contests. Even if they do play a major role in each Cloud's standing in the ranks, the contests aren't the only factors... And what sets off Calixte's explanation seems to be her excitement that her Cloud is the best at the academy... but when she goes into her description of the units and divisions, there's no excitement there. It's just a list of the divisions, the sub-divisions, and so on. Give us a reason, through Calixte, for her to be saying all this so shortly after meeting Eunae. Give us a reason to understand why she says they'll probably trade Eunae away as soon as possible.
And on the subject of trading Eunae away: my understanding was that each student was assigned to the Cloud for which he is best suited. Would it really be acceptable, then, for Sylph to trade someone away to another Cloud? Or is that not what you meant?
She suddenly and inexplicably felt a warmth of feeling for Calixte, -- Now, see, this is the sort of thing that makes me paranoid. Maybe I read too much dark fiction; too many horror stories about supernatural creatures. My first thought upon reading this was that Calixte had just cast something... just sent out some sort of effect that caused Eunae to think more highly of her. I don't know if that's what you intended, but I've begun to wonder why, exactly, Calixte is so well-respected and popular, and whether or not this has anything to do with it. And because she makes me paranoid, I don't trust her from this point on. And I'm fairly certain that's not what you were planning.
To take her mind off of the unsettling feelings that were settling somewhere inside her throat, -- I had to point out the sentence that begins with this phrase. I just had to say that I think this is my favorite line in the story so far -- it's descriptive, but not particularly so; it's got a flow and a feeling to it that I adore! 
So...
Not considering the prologue, which involves characters seemingly unrelated to the rest of the story, we've met two of the three main characters. At this point in the story, Eunae seems to be the main character, because we get so much insight into her thoughts and feelings here in Chapter One. We know Calixte more, really, from Eunae's point of view than from our own, or hers.
We're off to a good start, in which we can wonder what ties the prologue to the rest of the story. We know why these two characters become connected to one another, but I am not sure, exactly, why they have already begun to develop the bond they have. How long were they in the carriage before they began to talk to each other? Why did they wait until Irinifa was in view?
These are just a couple thoughts, suggestions and questions you might consider. More to come soon!
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Ah, there's something to look forward to! I'd like to say the same for our world...
Oh, I love this line! It sounds like such a natural thing to say -- especially in this situation. 
