I like this! It was an easy read with a theme that i enjoyed. I've always enjoyed the twist of the presumed victims becoming the assailants. It's absolutely a tale that's been told before but you did it well in a short amount of time. Giving it a very present day touch was a plus also. Nice job!
I agree with your message on hate. It is the worst part of this world and should be used towards the most vile of people/things if it is even to be used at all. It sounds like you have your mind in the right place and realize that there is a good message to be sent by getting the word out there and knocking it to the ground.
I did find that your writing ran together a bit. It probably could have been turned into a few paragraphs and would have come together much better. And while I see that you understand the illness of the word and feeling of hate, I would have liked to have seen you resolve your feelings with it and perhaps offer a solution to avoid getting caught up in it.
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