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Rated: E | (3.0)
Hi Celine!

Although short, this chapter is good...
Not to be a nag, but there are some misspellings, grammar mistakes, and I'd like to help you fix them :)

First sentence: "Thy Kingdom come, die will be done......" I think you meant "Thy" instead of "Die."

People whispered but there voice were still very audible.... "There" would be "Their." Add an "S" to "voice."

''May god have Marcy on his soul. He was a good man'' I believe it's "mercy"

''I am not comftobal leaving..." correct spelling would be "comfortable"

Near the end of the chapter, your main character walks Madam Bristol... to where? You never say. A few sentences down, you say she's looking out the window. This makes me think they're in a car, or train maybe. But then you say Madam got up and walked towards Eleanor... I suggest clearing that part up a little :)

''Good I’ll accampey you to the ship'' again, correct spelling is "accompany."

I suggest reading through your work before posting. That way you can catch these simple mistakes. Good job though!!
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