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Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
Really good short little story mate- however I didn't feel close enough to the main character to feel enough sympathy for him. That's usually a minor- but if it ends with Kevin telling himself he's going to go to hell. Maybe if you described him a bit more in detail e.g I saw my black hair, flailing with fear when I passed the mirror.'
Other than that a pretty fun little story.
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