I like the description. I really love the line at the end.
But I feel its to short. I mean its a nice snipit of a scene, but I'd really like to see you take it and run with it. That would make me incredible happy.
Also a little spacing would help this. Break it into several shorter paragraphs instead of leaving it as one big one.
I want to take my guitar and write a song to it. An incredible sad song..... with a lot of minor chords.... that picks up speed toward the end and then finishes with a nice decrescendo.
However...
Some of your lines kill the flow.
From the moment you met.
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Met what? If you want it to be between you and the person the song is about simply change it to we.
I admire your spunk and I love that you're getting people to review.
Nice use of colors and graphics. It makes the page easy and enjoyable to read.
Nice job listing all the benefits and incentives to joining the group. I think it was also a good idea to leave a bunch of basic links to show the regular incentives reviewing. That way if people find they can't spend the time reviewing constanly and put in the work needed to be helpful to the group they might still review in their spare time.
I really love this group. I think its a great idea. And I hope you keep it up. I think you have something great one your hands.
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