I found your poem to be very descriptive. As I was reading it, I felt as if you were portraying to the reader that death to you is the ending of life and hope. I'm not sure if the word skin would be the correct use in your last stanza, since your feelings, dreams, desires, and fears are kept within the soul. I would consider "soul" as the word to use only because you refer to your feelings, desires, ect. as being lost to the void. I believe you are very talented. I look forward to reading more of your work. I hope you will also take the opportunity to read and review some of my work.
Sincerely,
Shirley Janisse
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