Damn. Real stuff here. I completely agree with all of this, by the way. Only being seventeen years old, I see most of this in school and around my "friends." I think about this kind of stuff often, and you said it all very well. Good piece of writing, I hope more people read it and understand.
Wow, I really like this story! Very original, not to mention a little twisted. I like the intro, from the girl's perspective. It just made sense to structure the story that way. The only problem I had was how she was (obviously) naked, but it went on youtube. I'm sure they censored it and everything, but, for some reason, I just didn't feel completely comfortable with the idea (Probably just me). If you were going for that, good job!
Very clever. This was a perfect flash fiction story, great length, and great progression to the identity of the characters. At first I thought it was a couple of teenagers, so you got me. I also liked the title, it kind of made me think it was going to be sort of on the serious side, but I was not disappointed.
Such a powerful poem. I don't even know how to review this. My girlfriend has an abusive father, so I can relate very easily to this. "I made him do this, It is my fault." This ideology is very accurate, for anyone in an abusive relationship, but it's never the case. This poem moved me, for that, I applaud you. I don't know if you were writing from experience, but if you were, I want to tell you that things get better. I do hope you stay strong.
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