I don't quite understand how the beginning of the third stanza fits in with the rest of the poem. The rest of the poem, however, is beautiful. The images it brings to mind are wonderful, and I can feel the emotion flowing through your words. Good job
It's a good story, but I feel it's lacking detail. I know the Writer's Cramp has word limits, but now that you've won, maybe you could add more detail. Just a suggestion
The beginning of the story moved a bit too quickly, I thought. There was no suspense involved in the beginning, because it was quickly revealed who the third caller was.
I like the surprise ending. The story is well-constructed, and I didn't find any grammatical or spelling errors. Good job
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