As far as the technical aspect of your writing, it was good. The words flowed and the breaks fit.
As far as the story telling....it was real. This didn't seem like something you tried to pad. I felt as if though you were actually telling me the story, with a sort of controlled hilarity, and not reading a scary work of fiction.
As far as the content, unbelievable. I am a father of a four year old boy and a two year old girl. I am often jealous of mothers, as they are more or less the common provider. I am in the military, and my wife stays home with the kids. I feel like my primary role as father is to protect my family. I have nightmares about what you just described. A situation where I would be powerless to protect my little boy. It is clearly apparent you were given a gift.....twice. The best story telling are the ones you can't fake.
Write on!
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