I like this piece because just about anyone who has had a relationship (especially in high school) can attest to this! It's true that when a couple is first dating they are usually putting on a front (maybe not even consciously) to do everything possible to not screw up the relationship, if they even want to be in the relationship that is. I think another stanza before the ending maybe about the relationship ending and a rebirth occurring bringing the (hypothetical) subject of the poem through a healing process to achieve what is mentioned in your last phrase. Overall good job, it rhymed very well!
Hi Steven, I think you give a very good rundown for someone in the market to buy a laptop. I think bullet points would work better visually in the "What to Look For" section, where you could list out Memory and Hard Drive space, and I would suggest processor size (GHz) and video card size (for gamers).
I agree with your approach of using real-world setting for fantasy stories, it allows for the real-world reader to better connect to the setting and thus the story. There are a few spelling errors I noticed that you'll want to fix. As far as your newsletter-aspirations, you might want to submit this to the Fantasy newsletter editors for consideration!
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