This was a well written poem, and with interesting subject matter. I feel that any individual who has been in that situation will be understanding to it, the consistent pleading from another individual for help when you yourself are drowning in problems or depression is something that many people will experience at one time in their life and I think what you wrote and your expressions in writing it such as "Selfish and greedy you pull at my seams,“Help me I need you”, plagues all my dreams." helped to provide some very nice scenery for the writing. Please continue your work
This was a good story, I liked the presence of reality you managed to put together between the woman and the elderly lady, as well as the descriptive picturing you used of a woman working a typical job and needing to just get home to her loved ones, something easily relate-able by multiple readers. if there is more to this story I would like to read it and if not I encourage you to build upon it.
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