Hello,
I thoroughly enjoyed your story. I felt that both the plot and the character's developed well.
There were points that could have been more brisk. When 'the monumental change' had occured, I felt Mike's daily chores could be summed up more acutely.
Also, 'The savagely white teeth [that] ripped the darkness away' was highly descriptive prose. I felt that a more vivid description of the Jinn, when he unveils himself to Mike, was due.
The speach of your chracters was top notch though. The Jinns speach was most engaging and Mike's use of words truly gave me a sense of the individual you created.
Dee Nile
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