I loved your take on the ever mind bending question. Your explanations were very creative and well thought out. I for one truely did not think about it like that and so I must admit that I was impressed with this article. It's like the age old question "is the glass half empty or half full?" well I say it's neither, it's just half a glass,lol! Great job, write on!
This a very well written piece of poetry! I love the flow and the creative wording which really adds to the emotion. I look forward to reading more of your work in the future, write on! =)
Cute story! very descriptive with creative word choices. I like to read pieces that flow smoothly and make sense, well done! I look forward to reading more of your work in the future, write on! =)
This is a beautiful peace that really grabs attention and illustrates your emotions well! As a lover of poetry I always like to read things that flow smoothly and make sense. I like the creative word choices and descriptions you used for this. I look forward to reading more in the future, write on! =)
This piece was very well done. I love the creative choice of words and your descriptions. I kinda wish it were longer, but that's just because I like it alot. It is an excellent interpretation of grace and it's meaning to you and others as well I am sure. The only thing I would change is where you put the comma after, " And witness, nature's more than what it seems." I would take out the comma after witness, it seems to flow nicely either way though. I look forward to reading more, write on! =)
This is a very well written piece of poetry with lots of potential. As a lover of poetry myself, I like to read things that flow smoothly and make sense. I look forward to reading more of your work in the future, write on! =)
This is a very well written poem with lots of creative word choices and description. As a lover of poetry, I like to read things that flow smoothly and make sense. I look forward to reading more of your work in the future, write on! =)
This is an awesome piece of poetry you have written. The only thing I would change was where you said, The lift to your eyebrows...I would rephrase that to say, The lift of your eyebrows...but thats just my thought,lol! I like what you have written and look forward to reading more of your work in the future, write on! =)
As before, I think this piece has alot of potential. There were a few grammatical errors but other than that I think what you wrote is very deep and has inspired me to encourage you by saying that not all things in life are what we expect them to be, but it's not all bad either. I can remember when I was in your shoes and thought that life would never be good for me and I would question why I even exsisted. I'm not sure what your beliefes are but know that I will pray for you and would like you to read some of my pieces as I have talked about these kinds of things before. As before, I look forward to reading more of your work in the future, write on! =)
This is an interesting piece of poetry with alot of potential. I think it can be expanded a bit, but otherwise what you have is reallt good. I look forward to reading more of your work in the future, write on! =)
I love this piece! It really puts the emotion and the message of love out to the reader. As I am a lover of poetry myself, I always like to read these kinds of pieces that really grab your attention from the start. I look forward to reading more of your work in the future, write on! =)
This is an excellent piece you have written. It really grabs the readers attention and I love the creative word choices and description. I look forward to reading more of your work in the future, write on! =)
This is an excellent piece on the forgiveness of Jesus Christ and what His love means to us. I also love that simple reminder that not one of us is without sin except Him. Very well done and I look forward to reading more of your work in the future, write on! =)
This is an interestinf piece you have come up with. I see alot of potential in it and think it can be expanded, but otherwise this is a really good poem. I look forward to reading more of your work. Well done! =)
This is a very well written essay that just takes me back to the times when me and my sister would play dress up with my mom and grandmothers old clothes, those were the days, where you could be anything you wanted. Godd creative writing and description. I look forward to reading more of your work in the future! =)
This is an excellent pice of poetry that flows nicely and really grabs the reader's attention. Good creative choice of wrds and descriptions. Most poems don't do a good job of expressing emotion in the words being written as well as said, so this is really great! =)
I really liked this poem and think you have some real potential in poetry. Good use of creative wording and emotional imagry that really pulls the reader in. I look forward to reading more of your work in the future, well done! =)
This is very well written. I like to read pieces like these that grab attention and keep you going. You make an interesting point about our responsibilities to ourselves, this is a very insightful poem. I feel it could have used some form of rythme to it though but thats just me (I'm a sucker for poetry with a beat,lol) otherwise you have a great deal of potential with poetry. I look forward to reading more of your work in the future. well done =)
A well written piece of poerty with great use of creative word choices and descriptions. I think it is awesome that you have paid tribute to all those fine soldiers who fought in the war. I look forward to reading more of your work in the future. Well done! =)
This is an interesting poem with lots of potential and creative wording. I like to read pieces like these that grab your attention. I look forward to reading more of your work in the future.
These are interesting pieces and really tie the reader into them. The creative wording and descriptions are great. I think it is great to share one's inner most thoughts with the world so that the world may see a side of you that is hard to find these days. I look forward to reading more of your work. Well done! =)
This is a very interesting story with a good and unexpected ending. I like to read these kinds of pieces, and look forward to reading more of your work in the future, well done! =)
A great poem with lots of potential I would change the "and" on line 7 to "at" so it says "I lash out at the ones I love". Otherwise you have a really good piece here. I look forward to reading more of your work in the future, well done! =)
This is a good piece of poetry,we all have that inner battle going on. I only saw one misspelling of the word "fought" in the 1st stanza. Other than that, this is an awesome poem, and I look forward to reading more of your work in the future.
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