Wow, that is one annoying little man, I hope to never meet one like the one you conjured up. What a scary concept that would be!!! The introduction has to be my favourite part because it holds more humour then the rest, and seems straightforward to follow, or it is to me anyhow.
Very complicated, my idiotic brain had a hard time keeping up with it at first, but when you re-read it, everything seems to fit into place. Briliant way of portraying your theory and opinion on this subject, however as I am not religious myself etc... You must be getting a few defensive reviews. So I applaude you for putting this up on Writing.Com. =)
Such a sensitive topic, but you've managed to word it perfectly. I hope this dreadful disease has never affected you, and that it never will. The best line in my mind has to be "cause that would be so lame" cause this makes you rethink your own thoughts on the subjet of what you would wish for in reality, and proves that it would not be that simple to choose.
Wow. Your style in both physical and emotional reflects this poem, its great that you included the author of the poem (you) as it helps get a feel of how you wanted this poem to be read and potrayed by your explanation of yourself. I take it you were effected by this disaster, and I wish you all the luck with your recovery, whether it be physical, or emotionally.
This is where you got your idea on Egoism for your other piece? This seems less detailed as it describes more aspects of life, however the other one was less informative as this one is, I defiantely congratulate you if you come up with this one your own, it must take alot of effort and enthusiasm.
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