Thanks for that I enjoyed it, I thought maybe you were trying a little hard sometimes, perhaps being too descriptive?
It was definitely worth reading, and a pleasure.
I like it! A good tease is a good tease! I can imagine a few folks taking offence, keep it up, I hope you are getting some negative reaction. A big smile from me.
well done I liked the flow and the feeling of peace at the end, I went through ti twice trying to figure out what I thought was missing, it would have meant more to me if you had of put some of your emotion into it, rather than just your surroundings more about how the things that were going on made you feel. It would have drawn me in more. Interesting though and thought provoking, I look forward to reading more of your stuff!
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