Taking a child's life huh? Nice twist! NEVER expected anything to be that... well, there is is no word for that is there? I loved it when you say,"This blood is pure
yet I am not
We all were promised a cure
Instead we were left to rot
I see blood on my hands
But it is not mine
I took the life of another man
One of the worst kind" A very twisted, plotted write indded. Nice job!
Wow! That was absolutely break-taking! So much drama, so much suspense! I loved it! How...? Where did you come up with the idea for this... this... whatever it is? This is absolutely wonderful!!! I think my favorite part was when John slit the dude's throat. This, I think, proved his love for Sandy and the fact that he'd do anything and everything for her. But, there's a hidden message or meaning in the story and I can't just put my finger on it... Hmmm. Maybe it was John himself that was the man in the pin striped suit... I don't know. But still, this was a very good write. I encourage you to keep writing and keep penning your thoughts, for they are the key to your destiny, your career, if you wanna go that way. Very great write! God bless you, dear poet!
Wow! I'm complete;y speechless! What a way to take Scrpiture, re-word it a little, only to make something beautiful out of it! As equally beautiful as the Scrpitures are already themselves. Very good write! I'm glad to actually see some Christians on this site. You don't see many Christians online, seeing as I am one, I'm pleased to make your aquaintance, whoever you are. Keep penning your thoughts to the Holy One, God bless you!
This piece(whichever catergory it lies under) speaks a lot of truth. Such as, "A new generation realizes its mortality, and the human spirit is broken, driving us all into the occluded obscurity of the shadows". After that day, we(as America) lost ourselves to the corrupted world. Sad, but oh so very true. I have but one thing to say dear poet, the piece although remarkable, it didn't make sense. It was like trying to make a square into a circle kinda thing. Other than that, it was powerful, true, and oh, so very beautiful. God bless you, dear poet
wow! I applaude you for being brave enough to showcase this on WDC. This poem has a lot of emotion in it, one could only guess by your exquisite chose of words what you went through. I'm guessing physical/sexual abuse. Anyway, this was a very good write and I encourage you to keep writing, keep penning your thoughts to the unknown world full of things, that which we call life!!
Wow! This is truly remarkable! Your poem clearly portrays your love for this person. It captivates if not penitraits how much you love him/her, that you can't live a single day without them... That's SO sweet!:) Hopefully, it has worked out between you two and all is well. God bless you!
Awwwwwwww! That's so sweet! It kinda reminds me of my own testimonial birth. You see, I was born 3 months premature with undeveloped lungs, crossed eyes, and a hole in my small intenstine. Oh yea, I had bleeding on the brain as well... Hmmmm, I don't wanna bore you with my llife details(unless you want them) but, I'm alive, a miracle child, that's all that matters. Well, great write! May all of God's blessings be upon you now and forevermore!
Hum, Well, I must say, this piece is quite interesting. It was short n' sweet and to the point; I like that in a poem, not all poems but you pulled it off quite nicely. Although, my one complaint would be this: it has no structure. The line scheme was off and so is the rhyme. Other than that, good job, I beseech you, dear poet!
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