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Review of Multivalence  Open in new Window.
Review by Röö Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
{size: 4}Hi Dan

Oh man, I don't think I've ever read a work that so profoundly describes the writing process. I read through your essay twice, eager to see the second time that which I missed the first.

The idea of Multivalence is a brilliantly thought-out concept. By writing this essay, you did a great justice to everybody on Writing.Com. There is no way that I can give you anything but a 5.0.

I am also posting this review to the Public Review page, because Readers who haven't stumbled across this article yet should definitely be exposed to it.

Well done.

I'm going back for my third read now.

All my best, and may you continue to Write On for a long time to come.

Roo
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Review of Only Me  Open in new Window.
Review by Röö Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi there!

My aim in this and every other review I give is to encourage and uplift, while at the same time providing constructive criticism. Remember that everything I say in this review is my opinion and not the advice of a professional.

This piece, though short, is very well written. I'll take it line by line so that you can see what I liked about it:

Line 1, 2 : "It’s like shivering in a cold winter night, crawling in a creepy forest and crying in darkness."
Beautiful imagery here. The alliteration is masterful.
Line 4 : Repetition of "I can't"
It does a lot to lend to the sense of desperation your character experiences.
Line 7, 8 : "It's me."
I would suggest you take that phrase and change it to 'It's only me.'. Put it in its own line for a bigger punch.

I hope I was helpful to you in this review.

Write On!

Roo

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