I actually REALLY like this! Your characters' personalities all but jump from the page. Though there are no physical traits mentioned, I could almost see them with personality alone. Their dialogue is amazing, and it keeps the attention. Even though I really don't have an idea of what is going on with the story (Being I came into the story late) I am well aware of the moments provided. Even still, it kept my attention.
As a note to this, some more physical direction would be nice. This is, of course, just something I would like in reading. Such as: (PYRRHUS TUCKS HER HAIR BEHIND HER EAR WITH A FINGER AND LEANS IN TO WHISPER).
There were a few areas where punctuation makes all the difference in the way it reads, and there were a few places that I felt a comma was or wasn't needed, but overall, very well done.
Besides this, there was one thing that stopped me for a moment. You used the word sematic. I believe the word that you were aiming for was 'semantics'. Sematic is an adj. that means "serving as a warning or signal or danger. Used esp. of the coloring of some poisonous animals." - "The word semantics itself denotes a range of ideas -- from the popular to the highly technical. It is often used in ordinary language for denoting a problem of understanding that comes down to word selection or connotation."
Your next part is much looked forward to. Keep up the good work!
I have to say that it was short and yet interesting. I don't know what you were going for, but if you were looking to confuse the reader, you did a good job. That would have to be one HUGE rat to leave a blood trail you could follow through the woods. The roar kind of threw me off, too. LOL
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