This was so sad, and applies to many people. Too often it is the one whose always joking or laughing that's the most sad, or depressed, and like the "clown" humor is the only way people pay them any notice. I've personally had friends growing up who were like this (til I came to my senses and saw how they really felt). It's well and good to make people happy, but then whose there to make that person happy? Or like the clown, take them seriously? If you're know as the "funny one" for long enough, it doesn't matter what you do to change, it's how people will always see you.
I wish I could give a better critique, or better advice. I would suggest trying to not put the sentences when some's talking into a paragraph, mainly because a lot of people find it a bit difficult to follow what's being said and by who if it's in one paragraph. Though on the other hand it's not really much a problem here, so it's up to (just my useless advice). All in all I liked this :)
I've never been good at riddles, and this is a good one. Most likely I'll get it wrong, but would love to know the answer. Uhh...for what ever reason I want to say money...or nothing...but we probably can't give two answers...so I'm stumped.
This was funny! And realistic (as someone who's babysat enough times), for the kids, and the teacher. Kids that age really can start fights at the drop of a hat, and then just as quickly form an "alliance" (which was a good word). I can't seem to find anything to seriously critique, except perhaps Ms. Johnson could have given one or two examples of an earlier fight between the boys-but even without that this is a good piece. =)
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