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Review of Last Words  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
A very well written poem that looks for the inspiration to write an epic tale such as the masters had in centuries past. I have not seen this style of poetry before, but truly appreciate the detail of each and every verse.

The focus is detailed enough as to represent the object of where the inspiration should come from. I enjoyed reading this and look forward to many more.


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Rated: E | (5.0)
Short sweet and to the point this declaration or statement is bold and full of emotion.

You saw as in past tense and no longer feel this way or should it be altered to read as I see?

A thought provoking piece that does give one pause to stop and contemplate as to where it will go from here


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Rated: E | (4.0)
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A wonderful short story with plots, twists and turns and acrobats coming from all directions.

At first I was confused as I was sure I knew the direction of the story. In a twinkle of an eye I was fooled and whipped into a frenzy of action.

This is a clever piece. It did only take me one read to notice a few areas that need some grammatical attention. I dont want to knitpick this apart. If memory serves there were only about three spots that the wording was rough. I am sure if you read it out loud for clarity they will show for you as well.
I will gladly return for second review upon editing. I look forward to more of your writing.


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Rated: E | (4.0)
HELLOThe Tea Giver Project Author Icon, how are you today? I just stumbled upon thos interesting piece and due to the name capturing my attention I had to investigate further.

Bear with me if I happen to fat finger the typing on my phone and misspell a word or two. Know that this wouldnt happen if I was on my laptop.

This article brought about a few questions that I felt should have been answered somewhere within the text.

~How do you drink your tea? With sugar, with honey, with milk?

~Do you have a favorite tea?

~Which Beatle song were you listening to that sparked this?

I did find that this could use a bit of proofreading. Not so much for spelling, punctuation or gramatical error, but more so for content.

A lot of the content is repeated without being expanded upon. I would suggest reading ot out loud a few times. Take it a section at a time.

Upon edit I will gladly return for a second review. I hope you find this first one useful, even if only to know that you have me intrigued and questioning...do I want my usual cup of coffee or will it be tea today?


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Review of carnival swings  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
A fun packed poem that races down the page with speed and thrill. This artistic tapestry paints a vivid picture of laughter and thrill at the fair or amusement park.

Because punctuation is used I would consider using capitalization as well. Ifeel this would be a stronger piece with it.

Over this is a great poem. I could tell the prompts easily and yet they didn't distract from the poem itself.

The poem created a grwat visuL that was tantalizing as well.


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Rated: E | (5.0)
A very interesting piece. From observations in life these notes have been manufactured to track and help with character development in future writings.

I didnt nitice any grammatical or spelling issues. I am terrible with commas when it comes to punctuation, but the article seemed fine written as is in this arena.

Upon a third reading I tried to add my own suggestions based on the observations but was unable to do so. I can however give an example from personal experience:
☆a person who uses R's in place of W's and vice a versa, could be from a european country or someone who lived abroad there for a period of time.

I hope you found my suggestion useful. I look forward to reading something from you using these examples.


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Rated: E | (5.0)
A beautiful poem and tribute. To me this reads as if a eulogy and brought tears to my eyes.

I can see from the boldness of a few words this was for a prompt or contest, and wonder how it did.

I didnt notice anything to point out as far as needing any adjustments. I feel the piece stands on its own quite well.


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Review of Wolf Dreams  Open in new Window.
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
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I hope you find the review useful, if only to find out how well this particular item is received. Sit back and enjoy the feedback and attention. You deserve it.
  I consider it an honor to have found your port and this great piece of writing. Thank you for taking the time to submit writing into your portfolio. It is a pleasure surfing through trying to decide what to review.

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Setting the stage we know that a wolf or wolves are involved. To what extent is yet to be shown.This sets the tone and pace for the poem.

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I found the rhythm and pace to be fluent with the tale. At onset of the poem or dream I feel caught in the rays of the moon as the howling encompasses all I am.

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Overall I felt transformed as if I myself had become leader of the pack. I was watching all unfold with my own eyes and the sound I heard was my own voice carrying on the wind.


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Review of Harmony  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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I hope you find the review useful, if only to find out how well this particular item is received. Sit back and enjoy the feedback and attention. You deserve it.
  I consider it an honor to have found your port and this great piece of writing. Thank you for taking the time to submit writing into your portfolio. It is a pleasure surfing through trying to decide what to review.

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When I first read the title i expected a piece that was compliementary in some form or another. Glad to see I was right. Each stanza compliments the proceeding in such a fashion that gives the illusion that all is right in this world the poem belongs to.

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Overall a very harmonic piece. I found it to be soothing.


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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Another well written piece. This one takes a look at the planet through the eyes of a technologically advanced race of people that left earth many years ago and are now returning.

I didnt notice but one technical issue and that was the end of paragraph two had a period and then a comma. Other than that one little mistake nothing else jumped off the page at me.


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Rated: E | (4.5)
Thank you for the opportunity to review this short piece. I found it to be an interesting conversation between a reporter and a presidential candidate. I didn't notice but one small error...if i could call it that...
☆It's Mitt Romney he's jogging...
Should either be two sentences or place the word and , after the name.

Overall a good piece. I had nothing more to add or contribute to.


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Rated: E | (5.0)
A quick read that grabbed my attention. If this were to be on the back cover of a book i would definitely be taking home that book to read. Short and sweet yet it paints a large tapestry of intrigue and family dynamics all in 300 words.

I didn't see any errors that jumped out at me though truthfully i wasn't looking much at punctuation.
I feel the story rings tue and is tied together quite well.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Oh what a treasure trove of trinkets I found while reading through this comical piece. Full of drama and laughs I couldn't help but to smile and giggle at the antics involved. I knew someone had to be counting the names but i myself wasn't. What i did know was that with the chosen duo moving the household items that chaos would soon rear its head and mayhem would jump in to take over. The ease and style that this was woven together is a tapestry of creativity that flows with ease. No title seemed forced or out of place. Everything seemed to have its own place . Very well written.
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Rated: ASR | (3.5)
This appears to be an older piece with a broken video link. From the description itself I was intrigued to see just what the focus of this video truly was.
Now I am left to use my imagination. With no video and the ellipsis followed by people, it makes me wonder what object or animal is being personified?


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Rated: E | (4.0)
A clever piece that speaks volumes on a relationship that can be of contradiction and love. Rhyming with ease and a joy to read, i liked the message of opposition attracted steadfast.

Much poetry does not include punctuation but i have come to feel that adding it is a great way for the authoe to guide a reader through the experience of the poem. Punctuation and capitalization are tools the author can use to tell the reader to pause for breath or dramatic effect. CAPITALIZATION CAN BE diction for yelling or emphasizing a particular piece. I would suggest going back throughout ans adding the CAPITALIZATION and the punctuation so as to guide your reader on their journey.


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Review of Contingency  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
A picturesque tapestey is woven as the words flow down the page creating a vivid image of a voice that must be like nails on a chalkboard. I found this to be both unique and intriguing. I wasnt sure if the voice was ever going to spill forth and flow like water spilling over the falls and crashing into the boulders below.


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Review of Subtlety  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
No family dynamic is the same. Until we walk i. Their shoes, we never truly know what goes on behind closed doors.

This is a well written short story. It elludes to, and implies, a lot more than what is actually revealed, leaving the imagery to the imagination of the reader.

I didnt notice any grammar, spelling or punctuation errors to comment upon. This was a well wriiten dark and sad piece to read.


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Review of BENEATH MY MASK  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
A poem of with a voice that keeps love close to the chest. The voice shows love rather than speaks of love and to the recipient, this isn't always the best choice.
Verses 2 and 5 do not follow the rhyming pattern very well.
Other than that one isdue, i felt this was a good poem.


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Review of Life is good  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
A poetic freestyle piece that reflects on the finer things on life such as appreciating the small things.

The lack of punctuation is what gives this the poetic feel. I can see a way that this could be altered into a freestyle prose not to say there is anything wrong with how it is currently displayed.


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Rated: E | (5.0)
A picturesque tapestry unfolds as this voice of the poem takes us on a journey through memory and a search for missing keys.

Im not familiar with this form of poetey, but it was easy to locate the voice of the poem and it flowed rhytmically well.

I can personally relate to this search as i myself have run into this situation many a tume. Therefore it brought a smile to my face to bring up such memories.


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Review of Like Bitter Tears  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
A picturesque tapestry of frigid cold cascades down the papage in a lyrical rant. This exudes experience and first hand knowledge of the intimate details of rain, the road and a bicycle ride.

As I sit here in the Pacific Northwest I imagined this was one of our many locals out on the bicycle path.

This is well written and was a joy to read.


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Review of Joy  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Short and sweet as it cascades down the page, even reading this from my phone I can see the warmth and love leap off of the page attempting to influence and spread through the cities and countries.

Simple, short and sweet, packing punch and delivering a great message. Well written.


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Review of The Door  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
A poetic picturesque tapestry unfolds as i read from my phone this morning. Cascading down the page with rhythmic cadence and ease this piece talks of many paths and those that lay ahead.

This is well written and easy to follow. The imagery created is clear and concise.


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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
A well thought out piece written in an unknown language. Embedded links take you offsite so I wont be clicking those again. I believe, from clicking on a subfolder, this is written for a story and the translation is in that subfolder. I feel it is worth checking out.
Soing so was a bit difficult from the phone. I couldnt have both open side by side for translation. I will have to revisit this later.


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Rated: E | (5.0)
Sitting here reading this on my phone as my thumbs beginning tip tapping away, i am forced to think of another and how often we call upon our muse to preform. It isnt only with writing best sellers that we place this call to our muse, but also while reviewing as well.

This is a creative and fun piece to read that does give one a brief pause. I found it enjoyable to read and free of noticeable error gramatically speaking.


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