this was Great i love it so far,,
question, i dont think its important but how old are they?
uhmm i cant wait to read more.
you shouol dlet me know when you finish itt.
Write
on!
i reallly like this poem, its different, my all favorite line is, And witnessing His deeply loving, compassionate spirit… i just reallly like this the way it sounds when you read it. i love how this poem doesnt rhyme, at all, i love when a poem doesnt rhyme because most poems do then i just gett tired of rhyming poems but some of them are reallly goood.
write on!(:
i like the repetion in this poem, i love that its about th ebeach because i love the beach i understand the meaning behind it and everythingg, when i read others poems then look back on mine it just makes me feel like mine are so baad :( smell your distinctive scent i love this line the mosstt .
write onn!! (:
i reallly like this. i lovve how it is a story within a story. i still dont get why her hands arre covered in blood and i reallly love the ending. the last line it said " It was then that I remembered the whisper of the name, it was silent, it was sweet" i just think its precious and this line just makes me feeel wonderfull. keep on writing. (:
i reallly love this. i love the rhyme, and the imagery i love how at the beging it made me think it was raining because here it reallly is raining right now. i love how its says " master of the slave." i also love this part right here "So on the brightest summer days
man's children could not swim for a billion tiny droplets, were polluted all by him." great job! Write on!
i really like this, i like how the color the story is written in matches the "blue ball" in the begining and i reallly like the details, and the imagery in the story. i like the way you described eric. i reallly hope i will be able to read your next chapter. Write On!
i reallly like this i like the beginning where she looks in the mirror and looks herself up and down, like we would in the morning. its kinda what i do,i like the imagery and stuff in it, i realllyl love this peice. aand i love love love her name. it reallly prettty. Write On!
at first i didnt get the name part but then i got it after i read the whole thing(:. "In awe, repeat what you fear most!
… me … me … me …" i realllly love this part. its greattt. this is the first thing of yours that i have read and i loook forward to reading more of your stuff .
i realllly liike thiis because i ccan get into it and see whats going on. i like the imagery. welll, im a blonde aand therefore there is a lot of words i dont kniw. but its not your fault, its realllly ggooood. i like where it says slow smile.. Write On!
i realllly like poems, amd i reallllllly like this poem, i love the rhyme. thiis makes me wannnnna be at the beach! and i love the beachh. and i wish it was summmmer so i can go to the beach. "I came in here and fell in love With the avaricious life of sprawl
I gaffed the step of misconstruing Pals glee for the lifeless howl" i realllly like this stanza. keep up the gooood workk.
i realllly reallly like this peice it has reallly goood imagery and i can realte to parts of it. The table exploded with laughter. Everyone knew that Mr. Pace’s involvement with local politics meant as much to him as Mrs. Pace’s love of charity work.
i love this line because it just spounds like something that would hhappen at my schoooll. loll.
woooow, i realllly reallly like this. it reminds me of my friend because she to had long hair but her mama didnt make her cut it off. it just gave her reallly bad headaches. anyway this is soo sad. i was impelled to keep reading just to see what happened in the end.
i reallllly like this, i like how it has details, aandimagery i can realllly see whats going on. i like how it uses slang. and almost if not every line of diolouge is it's own line all together. there is some weird names in here but it'ss okay. it just makes it differrent. i think i should keeeep going.
i think this is reallly goood and i like the details and imagery in it.
i likke how it showes diologue and questions are on seperate lines. we weere just talking about tthat in my class like 5 minutes ago. i reallly hope things dont come crashing down.
this has alott of details, lik, i can see everything. but are there people in the roooom? i dont understand the window thing, like, was it open for some one to go in? other thn that i reallly like it! its great. i love it alott. the imagery is greeeaatt.(:
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its greattt. this is the first thing of yours that i have read and i loook forward to reading more of your stuff .