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Rated: ASR | (3.5)
It has some comedic elements. It could be more descriptive (show instead of tell). It leaves a huge question unanswered: How did he manage to end the date and finally get free?
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Rated: E | (3.0)
Funny Story, but a bit incoherent. I'm not sure "One thing lead to another" is a good way to begin a story, but hey, I a novice writer as well. If you decide to develop this further, It might be a good idea to add more character to Mr. Knight in shining armor. Maybe give the reader more a sense of his arrogance and privilege, so they rejoice when he's eaten.
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