I enjoyed this, but I think the arranged marriage idea is somewhat overused in medieval and fantasy settings, but that's just me. I'm glad you characterized Vyllotte with a degree of agency, so readers know she is not some helpless damsel in distress, but rather is an independent princess.
Also, good job on revealing a bit in this first chapter but not too much. Readers don't want to be overwhelmed by information, rather, spread it out through various chapters as you see fit.
Cliffhangers are usually frowned upon by most readers, but if you think you can utilize them well, then go for it.
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