The main idea of the poem is just a description of your secret name and what it stands for. I hope that's right. You see, for a person who is just reading a poem for the aesthetic quality it evokes, this poem doesn't strike the gong. I wanted to read more, to understand more and to feel the emotions you had when you wrote the poem. Or maybe it was just a quickie. :) I do those too, like doodles. :)
This poem reminds me of the biblical scriptures, especially Proverbs, in which there are several verses that state the dangers of folly and fools. So I guess in a way your poem can be described as didactic. With very simple verses you put forward your point. Personally I use free verse for my poetry but I really admire those who follow a particular rhyme scheme and meter. Its not an easy task and I applaud you for that. I enjoyed the poem very much. Keep up the good work.
I really found these tips helpful. When I started writing a novel a year or so back I just had a vague idea of the plot and wrote casually. After some time I got stuck. It just wasn't moving. I had to retrace my steps to make it work better. The preparation is definitely a must.
I read books mostly for entertainment, so I usually skim through them to get to the good stuff. Henceforth I'll be making an effort to understand the structure and other elements.
Your article is very reader-friendly and to the point. The information provided is a great help for aspiring novelists. Thanks a lot for the tips.
Its a beautiful poem. Touching and emotional. It hurts a lot to lose someone who we love a lot.
Your style of writing is pleasant and has a calming effect on the reader. Your usage of word is very good as well. I will be waiting to read more. Keep it up!
Poets do have certain grammatical freedom to create their own style of writing. I hope you were using that. Otherwise there are several mistakes you should look into. For instance you've written '..would have giving anything...' That doesn't make sense. I hope I'm not being too blunt. Its just to make you better. You've got ideas. You've got the skill. But you need to be more careful, ok? Hope to see more of your work!
An interesting work. You've really displayed your emotions. It makes the reader drawn in to your story. I think you've got real talent. Use it well. When I started reading it, I was a bit dumbfounded, but by the end I got a clear view of the story. Its good that you decide to change and move on. Nice work. Keep it up!
Its a good piece of work. But somehow I feel something is missing. I don't know what. The work doesn't draw me into it. And there is a slight mistake. I think you wrote should instead of showed in the sentence 'His expression...' So just correct that. Your idea is genuine but try to transform it in a way that people will feel like reading the full thing. Its good writing though and impressive vocabulary. Keep it up!
Ha! A perfect setting. Really creative. I didn't expect it'll end with the cake. Very good work. Hope you got good grades for this. It truly deserves it!
This is a beatiful poem. It makes you feel a lot. Something inside stirs up. The style of writing feels like a flow of feelings. Keep up the good work!
This a really good piece of work. Its a splendid description which I feel is very accurate. If it really is your dream, you are really lucky. Your style of writing makes a person intrigued to know more. I find it a fascinating job. I suggest you create your own story with this dream as the base. It'll be superb. Keep up the good work
Its a cool way of expressing the horrible work load at school. Its been ingeniously laid. I love the description of the student's emotions. It makes you feel for him. Great Work. Looking forward for more. Keep it up!
Its a cute poem and I believe it praises your friend highly. But I think you failed to notice some errors.
Mainly spelling and usage of email shortcuts like u instead ofyou etc. But that's your poem and your idea. But make sure you go through your poem for the spelling mistakes like stubbron for stubborn and listnes for listens etc. But overall its a good work. Make it more creative next time. Keep it up!
I think your work has great relevance in this present day. Yes its common now that we forget to spend time with God as we are too busy, with work or school or anything. Your work speaks a very valuable message that we should never forget. Keep it up!
Its a good story. A creative idea. But I think there is a lot of little mistakes. The correct spelling for strait is 'straight'? I think we write peered across and not peered off across. Also you've mentioned Zykast as Herok when he sees his sister being taken by the pirates. And you forgot the o in too for too young. These are just few of the accidental mistakes. I think you should edit your story a little more.
But I really like the idea and usage of words. I think you can do much better in your upcoming stories.
Keep up the good work
Wow! You've got loads of talent. This story is absoloutely fascinating. I must say you have a unique writing style that draws the reader right into the story. I felt like I was reading a really cool book. Have you published it yet? Please if its possible, send in the remaining parts. Keep up the good work.
Gosh this really great stuff. Oh send in the rest soon. Your story is very imaginative and different. The words you use for decribing things are very good. I really want to know whats going to happen. Its a first rate story. Keep up the good work.(Waiting to read more)
I think this is a very interesting poem. There's a lot of depth in the lines, making the reader involved in the story. The feelings of the mother are very well described. Kind of sad but with hope. I hope to read more poems such as these. Keep up the good work.
I think your story is really touching. I don't know whether it is true or not, eitherways I feel really sorry for Brooke.
Its not easy to lose a person you love. I should know. But its not the end of life. We have to strive on. Just by hurting oneself its not going to work out any better.
The story really makes one think about how children everywhere feel being abandoned and lonely. It makes your insides feel all funny and awkward. I think this story really brings home the message to the readers.
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