I'm really starting to feel this story, it kind of reminds me of Charmed a little bit. You really did a good job setting the scene, especially when Kristy was able to vanquish the warlock without any prior knowledge of the craft at all. I'm also interested to see how her power will grow later on in the story.
Its definently worth continuing, especially since I'll die if i dont find out the rest of the story. You really do a great job of keeping people in suspense about whatever could possibly happen in the next part of the story. Keep Up the good work! I'll be reading.
This is a very powerful piece of poetry. The powerful use of imagery vividly conveys the horrid experiences that Lisa endured quite well. She does a good job showing how painful thses experiences were. As to whether there are hidden clues within this piece, I do not know, but she is definently intelligent enough to make those clues as I cannot find any.
In this haiku you have said so much with so little words. You add powerful modifiers in order to add a sense of reality to this poem making it even more inspiring. Even those who don not know what a moon bud looks like may still feel inspired by the blissful atmosphere this poem provides.
This is a very unique and interesting haiku that you have created. You seem to be combining four nature haikus together to make an intriguing twist. together, your words weave a creative picture within the mind of the reader. This is an inspiriing poem to anyone who admires nature.
Pattern/Rhythm: The peom has no recognizable pattern such as pi or haiku, but it flows well and uses powerful words showing strong qualities.
Meaning: The meaning of this poem is the dedication to your father. You reveal powerful characteristics such as "unshakeable pride." Showing how inspirational he is to you, helps us to see him as you do, a great man. You even tell of some of his words of advice he has given you.
Additional Comments: This is a powerful poem which could help to stop anyone from taking their father for granted.
Pattern/Rhythm: In this poem you wonderfully executed the pi form of poetry.
Meaning: This poem has a strong passion giving offense to anyone who is completely in support of society's methods. However, the poem sends out a powerful message that nobody should ignore.
Pattern/Rhythm: Although you use a simple ABC style poem, the words within the poemn give powerful vision so as anyone who reads this will see the words come to life.
Meaning: In this poem you show how, just as a bird is traped within a cage, someone can be trapped by love, or rather a "relationship". Yet unlike a bird, he or she can escape from entrapment.
Additional Comments: This is a good poem for inspiring those who need advice on love.
First Impression: This is a great way to allow you readers to get to know the real you in a way other than in your writing.
Opinion: Even just by showing merely a few aspects of what you like, you allow us to make good inferences about what kind of person you could be, what we have in common. you personal heroes alos say a lot for what kind of person you truly are as well.
Extra: I really enjoyed reading this peace and I think I would enjoy getting to know you and your writing.
Plot: You did an excellent job portraying how skeptic the society in the story was about short skirts. You also used an excellent use of irony when at the end, everyone was wearing short skirts, while Nancy wore a long one.
you could make the story better by exploring Nancy's perspective of the situation, because the story is only seen through the eyes of the main character and is a bit biased.
Scene: The scene is not focused on very much, but as this is a short story, that is not too important.
Character Development: like I said before, characterdevelopment is not very crucial in such a short story.
Grammar: St. Mary's Catholic School(capitalize school)
genuine "Southern Belle"(suggesttion to put Southern Belle in quotes since its exactly what he called her)
Just My Personal Opinion: This is a really interesting short story with a simple plot holding an underlying meaning.
Form: Excellent form. Your use of powerful words within the poem and rhyming with other passionate words strengthens the image that presents itself whenever someone reads this poem.
Meaning: You make it very clear all of the vivid emotions that this person gave you, adding a very upbeat feel making readers have a small taste of how you feel.
This is a very excellent poem about having compassion. in the poem , the writer is asking mereky for compassion, to put their wants and needs first for a change. This seems to be a scenario between one who is to selfish and one who is selfless.
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This poem seems to portray a serious, yet playful attitude to it. You show how dangerous and manipulative the shadows are as well as how deceptive they can be, luring you into a false sense of security.
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This is a really great poem about losing your way. It really shows the fact that you stumbled upopn the path of darkness and worst of all did'nt try to fight it, until you found the light. this is a very inspirationalpoem especially to those who need to find the light themselves.
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This is a very indepth poem of how seeing the pain of others physically, fills you with pain emotionally. This is a crutch that nearly all hmans must bear, the fact that we feel pain from watching others suffer, in some cases the pain towards us is greater thatn the emotional pain.
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This sounds like a great way to fans of the show "Amazing Race". Its also a good way to find people that you have reality tastes in common with. This is also an excellent way to see if your suspiscions are correct about who will win, place , and show.
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Just from reading your first entry, I realize that you are a person that thinks deep in thought. I also thought that is was very philosophical of you to mention that the line between sorrow and joy is easily crossed. I would also like to add that sometimes that line is altered within our own vision meaning, we may only feel sorrow because we only allow ourselves to feel sorrow. I really like your blog.
This poem shows a very strong sense of love and passion between these two lovers. It is apparent through their actions and their emotions that, they both feel very strongly for each other. This kind of love is like a fire, spreading to others quickly. This love inspires those who have yet to find love and those, who have had broken hearts.
I can just imagine the different kinds of tuned that could go with this song. I love it! Well the title say it all. It shows us how learning enough to care just to listen to eac other's heart, our emotions, can transform our thoughts and our views for the better. Listen to my heart, quite a useful and scarce skill these days.
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This is a very passionate poem about the emotuions you feel from your spouse. It seems that there are also great feelings of gratitiude for having someone like this in your life. You also seem on top of the fact that you realize his worth within your life and don't take him for granted.
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