such a in depth, well thought, brought to page piece of work
did wendy and her man truly exist
they sure feel as though they did
if not amazed if so, how sad
I almost cried before the last paragraph
I wished I had left it there as, the cutting of her palm trees, hurt even me
and I didn't know wendy
such a wonderful life, I could feel as though the 50's and 40's shone thought for some reason
almost picture postcard , picturesque
I thank you from the bottom of my heart for writing this piece of perfection
and I will be reading it to another, tomorrow as it touched me deeply
lol, so perfect, and so well put, I like how you used the word christmas for each line
never truer words spoken
look for a wonderful piece of writing I just read about
Winsome Wednesday by teargen
she writes something which completely embodies, what christmas used to be like, yet speaking about another festival which still happens, I am sure you will love it
your writing made me chuckle, because I know you are so right, I hope you like teargens winsome wednesday and it takes you back to better times like it did me
ooo it almost feels confining, more as if, lost in the woods, and without sight of a opening,
could feel the chill of cold, with the ice closing in
very imaginative and filled with rich expressions of the feelings, sights and sounds, very good piece for something so short to catch the feeling of self
such a great opening paragraph, had me hooked and made us both laugh, them little goblin cheeky devils, also the pace is really nice I do like how you pick up from time to time that the girl is still running, at this point I am half way through this part of the story.
for some reason I am getting a little lost in all the commotion, but I guess thats why its commotion, maybe, if you explain the surroundings as she runs, as the wiz by faster, allies, places, over people, not related, like oh look there goes mugloes, the butchers and gone, you know then sort of things
you see I think it was the convocation with Fata Morgana that threw me, it felt like malissan had stopped for a breif second, and then carried on, was she supposed to be running along side Fata Morgana.
lovely descriptive, detailing of surroundings and items
I love how the serpentfolk, are the peelers, so apt
when the peeler begins to talk to mallisan are they stationary or still running with the goblins?
very good part of the story I would really like to read more, keep up the good work, really fun I'll be reading this to others later
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