I came across this story in the Short Stories newsletter. I enjoyed the switching back and forth from fantasy to reality and Josh's ability to tap into other people's minds.
In the line "As order returned to room, Josh watched as Katherine was placed on a gurney and taken away", I think you left out the word 'the' in front of room.
This story was very beautifully written. I had to dry my eyes before I could review it. I really like the part where Emily closes her eyes and Goliath kneels to the ground. Her parents know that Goliath is picking up her up for the last time and she will be with him forever, like she wanted.
This was entertaining! It was interesting that Doris was so caught up in herself and her 'misery' that she couldn't appreciate the genie that had just appeared from the lamp.
I also was not aware of the pronunciation of 'djinn' and laughed after re-reading the title. I enjoyed the play on words.
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